ok so a few things aren't that great...
but i can see this turning into something amazing with a bit of time and effort.
here are a few things that i think could use improving:
1. 0:00 ~ 0:10 your chord progression is ok(I really like the ARP you use). but the melody doesn't fit well with it and needs some heavy editing.
(some of the notes sound like they were played as sharps or flats when none were needed).
2. 0:10 ~ 0:20 same chord progression with a different melody. the melody in this section fits better than the previous, but still sounds off key somehow.
3. 0:21 ~ 0:26 still,., same chord progression as the two previous sections. melody same as 2nd section but sped up, and kick+hat+snare also added.
the #1 problem with this section is the kick. it would be MUCH, better NOT to have it on the up and down beat. it would sound much better if it was on the up beat only. the hat and snare are fine if left alone. the sped up melody sounds ok also.
4. 0:27 ~ 0:37 is i guess the part C in this song. the first synth to start isn't to bad. but the arp(i think its a poizone or toxic biohazard preset) absolutely killed this section for me. you may want to think about adding a different arp.
5. 0:37 ~ 0:49 is basicly the same as section 4. EXCEPT... there's that annoying kick again. that really needs to be changed.
adding a bassline on the down beat would be good. maybe consider adding some fading in and out transitions like at the beginning and at 0:37.
this is all i can really fit into this review and its probably confusing since I'm limited to how much I can write, and I'm not that great of a writer or explaining things either ;). so feel free to PM me if you need any help figuring out what i meant by something, or if you just need help with anything else.
3|5 6|10 needs work, but has potential. :)
DJ~CLYME